Haha, I love River locking the Doctor in ;) Your portrayal of Melody was spot-on—so very sad, yet she was so fierce and strong—and I loved your slipping in River's assassin reflexes, too. River coming to help her former self is just too precious ♥ Lovely job!

You just had a little typo: "Dressed in all black", shouldn't it be "all in black"? It was neat besides, though :)