Beautiful, a really nice first entry! Your Amelia insight was perfect, her anger and desperation were really intense, all those questions and no answer, all that feeling of abandonment, and her being so convinced that he thought she was too young and not good enough, so she had to prove that she was worthy and enough of a grown-up. You really, really made me feel for her so much, I just wanted to hug her. The writing really conveys her desperation and all the questions circling in her head. Wonderful job!
Just one typo I spotted: "She is more than ready to let him whisk her away is his blue box" (in his blue box)
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Date: 2014-11-17 08:56 pm (UTC)Just one typo I spotted: "She is more than ready to let him whisk her away is his blue box" (in his blue box)